I took a major step to give the most basic information about the software program to completely remove the need for any deletion. Chris F
I editted the article in an attempt to make it more neutral. Here's a summary:
- I changed 'all genres of music' to 'many genres of music' because it's nearly impossible to have arrangements for all genres of music.
- I changed 'very quickly' to 'quickly'. I suppose saying 'a simple arrangement can be created from scratch quickly' is still a bit biased, but it's true that it can be done quickly (for me, at least, and I'm guessing most people with a music theory background) and I don't know how I'd make it less biased without making it bloated and wordy.
- I changed 'literally hundreds of other things it can do' to 'many other things it can do' because 'literally hundreds of other things it can do' seemed an unnecessary thing to say. I'm guessing that many of those things are merely combinations of a few basic things anyway, and I feel the only unbiased way to claim it can do hundreds of things is to link to a source that details those things.
- I changed 'realistic' to 'more realistic' because 'realistic' is a value judgement. Technically, 'more realistic' is also a value judgement too, but I think most people would agree today's music computer technology results in more realistic-sounding music than previous technology. Also, there's got to be a line somewhere between an article being definitely biased and being bloated with weasel words.
- I changed 'impressively realistic' to 'more realistic'.
- I changed this sentence..
Together with a good bass and other instruments, Band-in-a-Box is increasingly being used by many musicians who want to play in a band setting without the inconvenience of having to get together with other humans, who may or may not be so patient as to endure countless repetitions and practizse loops - something that a machine can do effortlessly.
- ..to something which was more concise and less biased but still explained that musicians may prefer using a program to having people come over and play and change what they're doing to suit the composer's whims.
- I removed 'to cater to its fans' because it seemed obvious why Band-in-a-Box sold Styles, Soloist disks, etc.
Band In A Box
188.8.131.52 21:30, 19 November 2006 (UTC) John S.
Band In A Box Program
This page seems fairly neutral to me and doesn't contain any direct links to PG Music Inc's site nor does it violate any copyright. This is a very basic description of what the program will do as well as some of the improvements that have been made to it. I disagree that this page should be deleted.
- Please sign your comments.. This page needs more info, but it does not need more ad content.. it was written as an ad for Norton Notes and Band-in-a-Box.. but I fixed it for now. - 184.108.40.206 (talk) 20:04, 18 April 2008 (UTC)
Re: 'It was first introduced in 1990. Since then PG MUSIC has been a recipient of numerous awards.'
- What were the awards, or an example of one? It doesn't say the award was for this particular software, and since PG Music has other products, this statement could be off the topic. Rmkeller (talk) 00:15, 20 May 2008 (UTC)
More neutrality efforts
I've made more suggestions for more objective (non-editorial) language. Perhaps now we can remove these top warnings:
- This article contains content that is written like an advertisement. (October 2010)
- This article may require cleanup to meet Wikipedia's quality standards. The specific problem is: This article appears to be written like an advertisement and contains swathes of incoherent gibberish (October 2018)
– AndyFielding (talk) 12:29, 7 November 2018 (UTC)
Trying to improve the article
I have reworked the article considerably, trying to get a NPOV and add some references. I deleted the existing sound file, replacing it with an updated one. I removed the templates and, I hope, cleaned out the 'swathes of incoherent gibberish'. Eagledj (talk) 16:23, 8 March 2019 (UTC)